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Not much of writer, can I get some criticism or advice on this anniversary poem:

17 upvotes, 3 comments. Sidechat image post by Anonymous in Writing. "Not much of writer, can I get some criticism or advice on this anniversary poem:"

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Anonymous 4w

It may be clearer to the person it’s addressed to, but the last sentence doesn’t make sense to me. I think the rest of it is really sweet

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Anonymous 4w

I really think it’s good! “Looking cover” sentence is my fav. I understand the last line but it’s a little clunky “as I can as two” but I also don’t want to mess with your voice. I think I was expecting “as many days as I can with you” so “as two” is different. Could also say “as many days together with you/as two”

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Anonymous

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But I do feel as long as it’s coming from the heart it’s ok for the wording to be whatever you want. That’s what makes it special

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