
You already fucked up in the second word of the third sentence. Pick a tense. Are you rolling past tense or present? If there WAS a tiger and he WAS called Geoffrey, then he HAD many long stripes. Also, be sure to spell his name the same way every time. And maybe consider less short, choppy sentences and get a little more of a flow going in there, ya know what I’m sayin, my brotha from anotha motha?